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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 609
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 576



    Description:
       im sure people can relate how it is to be so very torn two diffrent loves both real but just diffrent


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    i am but one
    so small amongst these loves
    my warrior,
    hard strength
    lust
    but peace eludes us
    my lover
    my honest poet
    it essya without temptation
    such words
    a true test ,your waiting
    there is always us
    one or the other
    always waiting for the answer
    a soul shared by two .
    in the middle is the madness
    no pill or drink can dull it
    teh heart aches for one then teh other
    it all breaks
    no one sees
    alone in the bullseye




    Submitted on 2007-09-30 18:43:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very True...good job
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2007-10-02 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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