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Where is the Moon Tonight?

Author: SnakeBite7
ASL Info:    19/M/NJ
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Another poem I wrote, I'm trying to focus less on rhymes and more on content and freeflow, trying to broaden my horizons. Not sure if I grasp the whole concept of freeform yet though.

Where is the Moon Tonight?

I saw the stars tonight, they were like any other.
Shining like beacons of far away dreams.
We’ve seen them before, we’ll see them again.
But what if we don’t?
What if we stop looking? What if they stop caring?
Will the night sky be forever dark?
Will we never see the starlit horizon again?
And then, somehow, I realize.
Where is the moon tonight?
It’s hiding, my mind tells me. It wants me to find it.
I suppose it makes sense. It’s been in the same place forever.
Change is something it needed.
But still, where is the moon tonight?
It’s there, my mind tells me, you’re just not looking for it.
But when I look for it, it doesn’t appear as it should.
Is it the night sky I should be looking at?
And yet still, where is the moon tonight?
It’s gone, my mind tells me, it’s moved on for now.
Has the moon grown bored of us? Did we do something wrong?
Or perhaps it found a better world. I suppose it’s not impossible.
Where is the moon tonight, I wonder?
That’s it! My mind tells me. It’s so simple!
The moon is in my dreams. It left the night sky to be with me.
What a kind moon it turned out to be.
Oh, but now I notice the stars again, burning as bright as ever.
Maybe someday, I’ll have all of them too.
But for now, I’m content with the moon.
Because even if the brightest stars burn out.
The moon will forever shine in my mind.
In my thoughts.
In my dreams.
Tonight the moon is with me

Submitted on 2007-09-30 19:18:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Heh, I didn't know that the moon has so much personality!

I really hope that the moon doesn't desert us for another planet. Some of those planets have several moons. They shouldn't be so greedy. Besides, if the moon left, the tides would be thrown out of balance and we'd all drown. Or at least most of the coastal people.

This is the kind of poem one might think up on a night with a new moon. Wait, is tonight a new moon? Let me take a look...Nope it says its 86.9% there. Still, I looked out the window and couldn't see it. But that doesn't mean anything. I'm not looking hard enough. I wish I looked as hard as you did.

And the moon wanting a change? Totally understandable. But a lot of times I don't like change. Well, it all depends what those changes are.

Anyways, sorry to ramble (I am one wild and crazy guy!). I found your poem contains a neat, unique thought and is very well written. Superb moon dream!
| Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]

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