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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful Dewdots
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    Author: vitoko
    ASL Info:    24/M
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 690/442/104
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Referring to two McCartney's Song
    I hope you like it


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    dotsBeautiful Dewdots
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    Spring brought me the most beautiful Dew,
    Which lives in my heart now,
    Which is full of love,
    Thanks to her smile.

    I see the birds fly in a blue sky,
    They remind me when I used to dream about flying
    And now I fly in her arms

    Tomorrow others birds will wake me up with their singing
    They do not know that everyday I wake up with her beauty
    Her beautiful sight that sings me �This never happened before�
    And with her sweet lips that tell me: �follow me�




    Submitted on 2007-09-30 19:56:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you have nature calling deep in this poem. i see a vision as i read. great piece. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
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    EXCELLENT JOB MY FRIEND!!!
    This again shows just how much you have improved in your writing since first coming here to Elite
    I Loved the sentiment behind the words
    Dew is one Very Gifted Person to have you in her life
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please keep in touch!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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