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    dots Submission Name: Familydots

    Author: Little Gal
    ASL Info:    20 female, Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 469/431/94
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this about every member of my family, including me.

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    There's the big boss
    The one in charge
    The omnipotent
    His opinion counts most

    Then the loving caring assistant
    She means well
    But hurts all in sight
    By her words and misunderstandings

    There is too a controlled controller
    She is controlled by her wishes
    But controls others wishes too
    So with the dawn and sunset comes control

    Too exists a quiet one
    Sensitive, lonely and different
    Trying to suceed as herself
    She messed up her life

    Still in growth is the innocent
    Loved by all
    Accepted by all
    And she never makes mistakes

    Finally, is the yet to come
    Nort understanding quite what's going on
    He sits and stares
    At the family's fights

    A Family where each is different
    Where only one of them understands
    That to love
    You must accept

    Submitted on 2004-06-22 09:04:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow see this is great! i've read a much of your posts but this really stuck out i like this alot!!! I can relate it was great i can see all you wrote with great detail nicely done

    | Posted on 2010-01-17 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      not bad! i like the way you used the word control over and over about the controlling one... we have one of those in my family, too! wants to run everyone's railroad, but i love her anyway! this was an interesting peek into your family. i am assuming that you are the quiet one...?
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      amen to that... I am the oldest of 8 and I have tons to put up with ... I recognized at least 3 of my relatives here...

    well written I love the way you broke everyone down... then except it for what it is..
    awesome, that's family
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Oracle | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really sweet. It had a nice flow to it, and an even better message! I understand this well, you put you thoughts and insights into good use!
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, not a bad write at all. I'm completely impressed by it within the context of your age. It is also not bad for someone much older. You are far ahead of your similarly aged peers on this site. Thumbs up to the Bahrainian Barbituate!?! (I know that makes no sense)
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      i have to say i really like this one. i think that it is true for all familys all around the world very nice write keep up the great writes lia
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]

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