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    dots Submission Name: Au cinemadots
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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    32/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 821/406/72
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAu cinemadots
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    I've spent lifetimes in lifelines;
    piplines calm, Oily palms placed.
    As Trepidating falanges trace
    venus mounds,
    I'm bound by the sound of her heart beat
    sneaking peeks between fingers sleek
    She smoothly arched into a steeple

    To dwell in her church my finger would purge their prints
    hands clasped indifferent to individuality
    As we finish watching the movie




    Submitted on 2007-10-01 07:15:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    This site is freaking me out!!!

    Is you account all crazy too???
    | Posted on 2014-05-13 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      
    To dwell in her church my finger would purge their prints

    Oi!! *jealous*
    Although my hands shouldn't dwell into HER anything ;)

    Anyhoo,

    Seriously, this is one of those...ahhhhh moments where I praise you.
    So suck it up buttercup. This is a fav

    Loverly and passionate with an oh so you ending...Love it

    XO
    Moi
    | Posted on 2014-05-13 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2014-05-13 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      This has some good metaphor, well it is a metaphor in every way. And my guess is that the title means you'd like to get it right in the first take.

    Love takes care and caring. I believe you've got it right here, Dave.

    I don't think this piece is for everyone. The language is subtle and if I didn't know better, I'd say it all began with an innocent
    massage. If I asked for more details, I would be prying.

    I prefer to have my own experience of this type. But this was definitely crafty and I enjoyed peeking in, just to see how you managed the description, of course.

    Love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-02-28 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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