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    dots Submission Name: once upon a timedots
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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    26/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 758/362/68
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Once upon a time my posts,
    my rhymes,
    Were noticed.
    Once upon a lotus flower
    I scraped and scoured
    the ocean floor for
    remnants of ancestors.
    Like the stories;
    this catcher gone a rye,
    Clawing at dust mites
    As they bite my third eye
    And night mares gallop past
    At a pace to fast stay saddled
    The death rattle is more of a morrocca
    And hell the sweltering sting of a habanero pepper
    Cold hard conjecture meets fact and upon impact
    There exact location becomes a mystery for everything but gps.
    I guess I'm babbeling,
    Ranting
    Rambling without cause
    Yet for all of my flaws there is still cause for celebration
    As I utter some incantation uniting the etheral with the physical
    In plain sight spirits take flight for all to see
    and god is standing next to me beat boxing




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