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    dots Submission Name: once upon a timedots
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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    27/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 808/380/72
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsonce upon a timedots
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    Once upon a time my posts,
    my rhymes,
    Were noticed.
    Once upon a lotus flower
    I scraped and scoured
    the ocean floor for
    remnants of ancestors.
    Like the stories;
    this catcher gone a rye,
    Clawing at dust mites
    As they bite my third eye
    And night mares gallop past
    At a pace to fast stay saddled
    The death rattle is more of a morrocca
    And hell the sweltering sting of a habanero pepper
    Cold hard conjecture meets fact and upon impact
    There exact location becomes a mystery for everything but gps.
    I guess I'm babbeling,
    Ranting
    Rambling without cause
    Yet for all of my flaws there is still cause for celebration
    As I utter some incantation uniting the etheral with the physical
    In plain sight spirits take flight for all to see
    and god is standing next to me beat boxing




    Submitted on 2007-10-01 07:30:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You're rambling was great to read and reminded me of te movie Dogma, one of my favorites right under The Fifth Element. This simply reminded me of when I had first joined ES and wow, nearly 4 years ago, people seemed comment on everything. it was a frenzy. lay out help, reformatting ideas, personal relations to the piece, out right but constructive criticism. and goodness i worked hard, posting and making sure to recomment as many other people in return. then i went through a good year of rping and then after i out grew that, i began my little snippets of poetry which arent nearly what they once were (it gives me something to do and away to just chill out for a bit) and posting them and well not so much attention any more. it almost saddens me but its not a drastic change, just something that causes you to tilt your head and say oh, mainly because a piece that once upon a time would recieve four comments now only managed one. and it was two sentences with the word dude in it. anyhow nice writing.

    later,
    Ash.
    | Posted on 2009-01-20 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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