[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Botoxdots

    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    32/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 821/406/72
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 778
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 488


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    To confuse the issue we infuse the tissue
    with botulinum toxin as if we've forgotten
    Our bodies are our temple-Exemplified
    We deny our sense of vision then we fix our eyes
    Read between the lines while they still exist
    before the muscles succumb to paralysis
    Witness narcissists
    Who use acupunturesc needles
    To deliver injections lethal
    So scarab beetles
    can claim our souls
    before they're supposed to.

    Submitted on 2007-10-01 07:32:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Perfect! Seriously, hit right on the head!
    First three lines just bang you over the head with realism. God I love the way you think.
    So self indulgent! Obsessed with perfection and the ideal reflection we want others to see, all beauty is lost in the process.
    We poison to look good and die deceased.

    I don't even blow dry my hair...lol

    Peanut gallery nut
    | Posted on 2014-05-13 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      The person below is very right. Lots of good lines through this piece and all are very focused on the subject at hand. and what a subject - y god my mother has this friend named Margaret who is loud as hell. recently she lots over 80 pounds and then went through remodelinging at the lift and tuck factory. she looked better fat. anyhow nice piece.
    | Posted on 2009-01-21 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      i saw an advert here on german tv, (do you remmember lee majors the bionic man)and i thought what the hell did he do with his face, it somehow didn,t match the rest of his body.tom (eversmiling) cruise that,s another one,and the woman far to many to list. what,s wrong with groing old in dignity(like bridget bardo for example). you have picked a really good theme for your poem, i could ramble on here but it,s getting late,well thought out and cleverly written.the message is clear
    (Our bodies are our temple-Exemplified)

    (Read between the lines while they still exist)
    just two of many good lines in your poem, i liked the ending it wrapped the poem up well, like a warning.
    ps i wrote a poem on this subject under my old user name"a bonfire of vanites".but it didn,t hit the nail on the head like your poem here.
    take care
    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    written by Daniel Barlow
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Fasade written by jackz
    AI written by poetotoe
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Bond written by saartha
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    What happens written by Wolfwatching




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]