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Concentrated Toxin


Author: Dimension_X
ASL Info:    17/F/NJ
Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 124 /108 /70
Words: 236
Class/Type: Rant /Serious
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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A rant I wrote in my first period Calc class based on recent events. the title is random.

The world has really started to get to me.


Concentrated Toxin



This place has filled me with such hatred,
hypocrisy
I hate it.
I wish I could go back into my mind
in euphoria and love.

This town has raised its children
with irresponsibility and over-confidence.
I'm not quite too sure what they're all
so damn confident about.

Maybe how they're able to penetrate outsiders minds
and convert others thinking into their own...

I hate this.
Moreso, I hate how I hate.
I never wanted this.
I've fought it off for as long as I possibly could.

But it's toxic.
Concentrated to the point of no return.
It chokes you down.
It's choking me down.
I'm crossing my fingers for my return.
Hoping that I can escape this town
before it completely takes hold of me.

I hear them in the corridor.
            "Oh my God, that's so gay."
I want to get out.
            "You're so fucking retarded."
Save me.
            "I can't belive he was that stupid."
I'm losing it.
            "Haha, did you see that idiot?"

I wonder,
does the sky that looms above us
know of the evils underneath?
Why would the sun still shine on our demons?

The birds circle over head as vultures over prey.
But really,
we are vultures on the ground.
Slowly torturing our own kind.




Submitted on 2007-10-01 09:45:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hypocracy should be hypocrisy i think
but i could be wrong
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I hate this.
Moreso, I hate how I hate.
I never wanted this.
I've fought it off for as long as I possibly could.

this is cool, semi deep and very self reflective...
______________

The birds circle over head as vultures over prey.
But really,
we are vultures on the ground.
Slowly torturing our own kind.

i like this last bit very much
its different and prettily gruesome, one of those thoughts that you cant help but probe like a sore on the roof of your mouth, or a loose tooth
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well done
xoxo
| Posted on 2007-10-01 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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