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    dots Submission Name: Shadow Dancedots
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    Author: srcastic1
    ASL Info:    18/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 96/97/28
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 471
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 909



    Description:
       This poem is about sex basically. It's mainly from the perspective of the shadows on the wall next to the bed.


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    dotsShadow Dancedots
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    Silhouettes stage a mating dance splayed across wall.
    The locked door remains a saint, a guard
    for the blushes that paint their naked skin pink
    while the shadows above smile down.
    Kisses kill stillness, the shyness, the silence.
    Fulfillment is near. Shadows pretzel-locked
    tightly wound limbs on skin
    on liquid electric virility.
    Breath penetrates.
    Wall people collide.
    Form swallows form to dissolve unresolved,
    to ignite finally the light in the wall.
    Underneath blood their bones aching
    to stay, to live in the warmth that it gives.
    Embers burning, churn the machinery,
    Keep the intensity going, glowing
    shapes on the wall fall away
    to race, to breathe, to heat, to seize
    and hold,
    and flush away shape and shadow dance,
    to slide away, sashay into space.




    Submitted on 2007-10-02 15:19:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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