vain

Author: love gone wrong ASL Info:    27/m/colorado Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42 Words: 68

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vain

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Rotting on the inside Black holes in which to hide Locked away from life itself Confidence and love on the shelf Trying to survive Building a hive A type of security blanket To hide away...to make it A tomb of sorts Built by cohorts Warm, dry and all alone Setting the mood....feeling the tone The lid is shut Darkness hiding the cut Hiding the pain Hiding.... In vain

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