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vain


Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42
Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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i was told by several people to write something other than first person(webmaster includeed) so i thought id give it a shot. what do you think?


vain



Rotting on the inside
Black holes in which to hide
Locked away from life itself
Confidence and love on the shelf
Trying to survive
Building a hive
A type of security blanket
To hide away...to make it
A tomb of sorts
Built by cohorts
Warm, dry and all alone
Setting the mood....feeling the tone
The lid is shut
Darkness hiding the cut
Hiding the pain
Hiding....
In vain




Submitted on 2004-02-04 16:48:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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