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    dots Submission Name: Mixed Emotionsdots

    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       the title pretty much says it all

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    dotsMixed Emotionsdots

    I'm with her,
    Every day and night,
    I tell her I love her,
    And that everything feels right.

    She's been through so much with me,
    She was there when no one else was,
    But my heart's bein a fool,
    I can't control what it does.

    I don't want to hurt her,
    I'm not tryin to be mean,
    But my feelings are scattered,
    I'm torn between.

    I have feelings for her,
    As well as another,
    Someone who's close to me,
    Someone who's younger.

    I told them how I felt,
    They said they used to feel the same way,
    But they said since we're both take now,
    We will just have to see, how things turn out someday.

    I'm ok with that,
    Since we're both always goin to be around,
    I just know someday,
    We will get to try us out.

    Until that day,
    We will just be friends,
    But I will still always love her everyday,
    Until the very end.

    --You know who you are--

    Submitted on 2007-10-02 17:26:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written very well, though the flow needs some work. I could really feel the confusion and it was detailed nicely. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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