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    dots Submission Name: So I'm Waiting For Yesterdaydots
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    Author: Flowerinbloom
    ASL Info:    22/M/Earth (I think)
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 700/559/123
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       Havent written anything in a while so I'm a bit rusty you could say lol just a little piece tell me what you think.


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    dotsSo I'm Waiting For Yesterdaydots
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    The night air is heavy,
    its filled with my guilt.
    Each step brings me further to insanity
    crying over spilt milk.

    I'm trying to find my way back to you,
    carrying my tears in a cup,
    we've never been out of love like this
    and darling I've had enough.

    I'm pulling my sweater closer
    but comfort still escapes me.
    Deceit sends shivers to my bones
    and the light becomes harder to see.

    I'll erase the blame from my forehead,
    it's your mistake not mine.
    I didn't lead you into his willing arms,
    you followed the bell's chime.

    I'm tired now so I'll wait a while
    and sit here on these steps.
    I'm hoping time will catch up to me,
    bring laughter to the tears I've wept.

    So I'm waiting for yesterday
    before all my world had changed,
    tomorrow doesn't seem too promising
    and the present feels too strange.




    Submitted on 2007-10-02 22:13:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can remember waiting for yesterday, even dressed for it. Aaah even yesterday failed me.

    Correy
    | Posted on 2007-12-01 00:00:00 | by AnotherNobody | [ Reply to This ]
      Rusty, thats what u call it. You were shinig brighter than the brightest star with that piece. I've realised that u have alot of fans on this site, didnt know u were so popular. "Anyways u know who i am, Ur biggest fan. So keep on writing words that makes us all understand"

    P.S.
    Ur back and already starting off strong

    Brian
    Chere Amie
    | Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      good poem from a good poet
    I like the first stanza ..

    I'm pulling my sweater closer
    but comfort still escapes me

    very good lines beautuifily painted

    I think that I found anther talented poet in this site !



    | Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. It's simple, but it works. I like how all of the rhymes aren't exactly perfect (ex: cup and enough). Seems more natural that way, instead of sounding forced.
    I used to be waiting for yesterday... back when I was more depressed. Now I'm just pissed off all the time lol. ...[censored] yesterday.

    Anywho, I like this. I wouldn't say it's the best that I've ever read from you, but it's fantastic nonetheless. You're one of the most talented people I've come across.

    Nicely done (as always).

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]


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