i cant let this in -------------------------------------------
i cant let this in.
these thoughts are a sin
i dont knwo where im going
but i know where ive been
i wish i could be forgiven
but that'd take it all away
i just wish we could be okay
but things have faded
and people have changed it
You touched a subject where everyone can relate to some extend to one point or another in there lives, where you have done something wrong, where you seek forgiveness even then you know your asking to much.
Although I like the flow I think there should be some punctuation, it will make for an easier read and emphasize between the different feelings. Just ponder over this, this is how I would have done it.
I can’t let this in!
These thoughts are a sin!
i don’t know where I’m going
but, i know where I’ve been.
i wish i could be forgiven
but, that'd take it all away.
i just wish we could be okay,
but things have faded
and people have changed it .
I kept the ‘i’ small case, I think you wanted to show the reader how small you feel.
Submission Name: i cant let this in
