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    Author: tainted-faerie
    ASL Info:    18/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 12/16/25
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 82
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    the tears wont come
    i'm still holdong them back
    none escaping, not one
    blood on the floor
    i bet this hurts you more
    im sorry
    but my consience walked out the door
    i didnt want it anymore
    i tried to fold
    to fit myself into this mold
    but i broke it
    and threw it all away
    i wish i could say
    i love you...

    these stupid tears
    finding their way out
    they wont leave me alone
    and im now on my own
    you left me here
    with out a care
    or a backward glance
    I left you for the blade
    the sweet razor of sin
    and threw us away, into the bin
    will you forgive me oneday
    i guess today,
    its too late




    Submitted on 2007-10-03 10:15:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow..words are not even enough to commend for this write! Absolutely beautiful--I can feel the pain incorporated. Also, the visualization is there.

    A very emotional write, and a very well written one indeed. You just need to touch up on your grammar and spelling. Other than that, good job.

    ~Steph.
    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by xXCptn_SephyXx | [ Reply to This ]



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