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    dots Submission Name: My Promise to Youdots
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    Author: the heartless
    ASL Info:    15/male/LA
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 24/68/43
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 131
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    Bytes: 1537



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       This isn't just a peice of writing, this is the truth, this is my promise to you, and all of the world.


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    dotsMy Promise to Youdots
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    Stare into my eyes, what do you see
    You see yourself in pain, this is the preferency
    Ha, I laugh at you, you insignificant maggot
    Stand up and slit your wrist and bleed

    If you have not the strength to walk in pain
    Then all that you live for will parish in vain
    You mine as well die, you worm
    Come on, do it, are you scared

    Are you scared of what awaits you on the other side
    Then hide
    Hide you fool, run to the shadow, your free
    Never come back to me

    As time passes you will disobey me and come again
    No, this time you come wanting to be free of sin
    I can’t help you, but I can take this pain from you
    My hero is a man called Lord, King, the Messiah

    Like he did years ago, this is what I dream
    I want to take your pain; I want to carry you to a stream
    Wash away your curses and bare them myself
    In the beginning you sought me as an enemy

    But by the end
    I promise you I will be your friend
    I will take all hurt away, I will bare the smell
    I will make sure all go to heaven, even if it means I must go to hell

    I am the fool with a foolish dream
    I am the freak who will seek only one thing
    Your pain
    Your hurt
    Your desolation of dreams that bind you to a scared life and site of mind

    Take my hand, let me have them
    My name is Ryan, someday, I will take all your pain




    Submitted on 2007-10-03 15:54:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aw, it's so lovely! It feels like a Christianity-inspired piece, you know, to follow Father's footsteps. But you have some grammar and spelling problems lol. Just work on those, but other than that it's imperfectly perfect!
    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by Tisa | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, it makes me think yet it also makes me want to cry. I don't know why it just does, it has that power over me. On a more critical note it isn't structured very well, perhaps you wrote it that way on purpose, I don't know.
    | Posted on 2007-10-03 00:00:00 | by Max Million | [ Reply to This ]



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