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    dots Submission Name: unkowndots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsunkowndots
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    The rain falls and falls as I cry
    It helps me survive the pain inside
    You left me to fall on my own
    And yet I am here to with out you
    And I am here alive not dead.

    Did you think you could really fool me?
    Or was I just your fantasy.
    Your dream
    Your wish
    My nightmare

    I lived cause I knew
    Knew what you would do
    But I donít understand why
    Why you left
    Left me alone

    But I donít care
    I can move on
    Without you
    I have my own life to build
    And I will do it all
    Alone




    Submitted on 2007-10-04 03:28:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Perhaps one of these might work for you: "Somewhere Beyond the Tears" or "Alone but Alive" or "Aftermath of You."

    I would not want to try to change what you have to say, but I'll offer a suggestion for your line, "And yet I am here to with out you." I think you mean "And yet I am here, too, without you."

    Break-ups are hard in the best of circumstances. I feel the pain in this poem.

    Take care, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-10-05 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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