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The rain falls and falls as I cry
It helps me survive the pain inside
You left me to fall on my own
And yet I am here to with out you
And I am here alive not dead.
Did you think you could really fool me?
Or was I just your fantasy.
I lived cause I knew
Knew what you would do
But I donít understand why
Why you left
Left me alone
But I donít care
I can move on
I have my own life to build
And I will do it all
Submitted on 2007-10-04 03:28:17
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Perhaps one of these might work for you: "Somewhere Beyond the Tears" or "Alone but Alive" or "Aftermath of You."
I would not want to try to change what you have to say, but I'll offer a suggestion for your line, "And yet I am here to with out you." I think you mean "And yet I am here, too, without you."
Break-ups are hard in the best of circumstances. I feel the pain in this poem.
Take care, Sharon
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