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Yes. No. Maybe so

Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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reposted to see if this title works better than treasures away

Yes. No. Maybe so

Why do we give our treasure
away? Without measuring
the worth of the promises,,
signing on a dotted line,
being sure and secure
for more that the fleeting moment
it takes to say No.
Call me Baby, or sweetheart.
Buy me dinner. Buy me a ticket.
Bribe me with stolen kisses
And promises of better things to come.
Melt chocolate on my lips
While you dip in my pot of gold.
Make with me and come
Take from me and go
And leave me wondering
Why we women give
our treasures away?

Submitted on 2007-10-04 10:16:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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well not to be mean
i dont think this is good.
i mean its not horribly awful, but its no good.
i dont get what you are trying to say.
| Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]

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