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    dots Submission Name: Yes. No. Maybe so dots
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    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1107
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 616



    Description:
       reposted to see if this title works better than treasures away


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    dotsYes. No. Maybe so dots
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    Why do we give our treasure
    away? Without measuring
    the worth of the promises,,
    signing on a dotted line,
    being sure and secure
    for more that the fleeting moment
    it takes to say No.
    Yes.
    Maybe.
    Call me Baby, or sweetheart.
    Buy me dinner. Buy me a ticket.
    Bribe me with stolen kisses
    And promises of better things to come.
    Melt chocolate on my lips
    While you dip in my pot of gold.
    Make with me and come
    Take from me and go
    And leave me wondering
    Why we women give
    our treasures away?




    Submitted on 2007-10-04 10:16:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      uhm.
    well not to be mean
    but
    i dont think this is good.
    i mean its not horribly awful, but its no good.
    i dont get what you are trying to say.
    | Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]


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