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    dots Submission Name: Warm Fuzziesdots
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    Author: nicelyJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 999/519/73
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       this poem is about the warm, fuzzy feelings you get when you have a crush/infatuation. In my case, I often get these feelings for the wrong people, and I wind up frustrated that I can't/shouldn't share/act on these feelings.


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    dotsWarm Fuzziesdots
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    Iím thoroughly convinced now
    that my warm fuzzies donít work for me.
    Rather, at best theyíre just contrarians,
    but Iím beginning to believe thereís something more nefarious.
    Perhaps theyíre part of the grand scheme,
    another cog in my self-destruct machine,
    making the button so much easier to press. Yes, I see them now, Knives disguised in butterflies clothing.
    Dressed for my undoing.
    Tearing me up on the inside, and screwing
    with my wiring.
    All the while I continue with my admiring and plummeting into miry depths that would leave me bereft of breath, yet they commense, with firing
    false signals to my system,
    and blocking the neuro-receptors
    that connect to wisdom.
    The alert has reached critical, close to the point of meltdown,
    and I can feel myself melt now.

    Nicely J




    Submitted on 2007-10-05 07:29:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Perhaps all of us have fallen victim at one time or another to "Knives disguised in butterflies clothing" and it takes being hurt to realize we must use our brains as well as our feelings. I found your poem thought-provoking and insightful! Well done, Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was going to be a piece about warm winter slippers but the piece took "warm fuzzies" to the opposite feeling. I love prose and pieces that seem to take raw emotion and find a place for them. It's like a false feeling in the world.

    Great!
    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written. I enjoyed this piece ...it is amazing what you can write when you over think things lol
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      The internal rhythm is good. It reads itself well. That is difficult to accomplish in a free form poem. I like it. Sorry for the lack of depth in this critique, but I truly get the message, and over inspection would only louse it up.
    I like the knives dressed in butterflies clothing line. Not quite the wolf in sheep garb, but the essence is there.

    Ariva

    Sol
    | Posted on 2007-10-05 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
      this is cool
    a nifty perspective to take

    "Tearing me up on the inside, and screwing
    with my wiring. " i loved this part the bestest

    but tell me...is this a word "contrarians,"
    or just made up

    you did great on this

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-10-05 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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