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Warm Fuzzies


Author: nicelyJ
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Words: 156
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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this poem is about the warm, fuzzy feelings you get when you have a crush/infatuation. In my case, I often get these feelings for the wrong people, and I wind up frustrated that I can't/shouldn't share/act on these feelings.


Warm Fuzzies



I’m thoroughly convinced now
that my warm fuzzies don’t work for me.
Rather, at best they’re just contrarians,
but I’m beginning to believe there’s something more nefarious.
Perhaps they’re part of the grand scheme,
another cog in my self-destruct machine,
making the button so much easier to press. Yes, I see them now, Knives disguised in butterflies clothing.
Dressed for my undoing.
Tearing me up on the inside, and screwing
with my wiring.
All the while I continue with my admiring and plummeting into miry depths that would leave me bereft of breath, yet they commense, with firing
false signals to my system,
and blocking the neuro-receptors
that connect to wisdom.
The alert has reached critical, close to the point of meltdown,
and I can feel myself melt now.

Nicely J




Submitted on 2007-10-05 07:29:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Perhaps all of us have fallen victim at one time or another to "Knives disguised in butterflies clothing" and it takes being hurt to realize we must use our brains as well as our feelings. I found your poem thought-provoking and insightful! Well done, Sharon
| Posted on 2007-11-10 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this was going to be a piece about warm winter slippers but the piece took "warm fuzzies" to the opposite feeling. I love prose and pieces that seem to take raw emotion and find a place for them. It's like a false feeling in the world.

Great!
love,peace,joy&smiles to share
tif
| Posted on 2007-10-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Well written. I enjoyed this piece ...it is amazing what you can write when you over think things lol
| Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  The internal rhythm is good. It reads itself well. That is difficult to accomplish in a free form poem. I like it. Sorry for the lack of depth in this critique, but I truly get the message, and over inspection would only louse it up.
I like the knives dressed in butterflies clothing line. Not quite the wolf in sheep garb, but the essence is there.

Ariva

Sol
| Posted on 2007-10-05 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]
  this is cool
a nifty perspective to take

"Tearing me up on the inside, and screwing
with my wiring. " i loved this part the bestest

but tell me...is this a word "contrarians,"
or just made up

you did great on this

xoxo
| Posted on 2007-10-05 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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