Description: This was my prayer. It began "for we are so flawed."
as to writing advice, i need general thoughts on how to improve the format, and whether or not it flows
also, the words "fix us" i guess are meant to be "forgive us" but i wanted something more progressive.
any help would be much appreciated.
-thanks so much, love peace-
For We Are So -------------------------------------------
Fix us Oh Lord
for the ignorance of man
Fix us Oh Lord
for self promoting plans
Fix us Oh Lord
for a brother's fallen hand
Fix us Oh Lord
for fighting of our lands
Fix us Oh Lord
for underdevloped masses
Fix us Oh Lord
for overfilled glasses
Fix us Oh Lord
for the failing of families
Fix us Oh Lord
for greediness in legacy
Fix us Oh Lord
for the diminishing of green things
Fix us Oh Lord
for the straying of seedlings
Fix us Oh Lord
for misconceptions in friend
Fix us Oh Lord
for belief in dire ends
Fix us Oh Lord
for our petty behavior
Fix us Oh Lord
for You Alone are our Savior
Submission Name: For We Are So
