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    dots Submission Name: Yhewwhu heart beats....dots

    Author: rawpot
    ASL Info:    24/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 383/256/84
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 505
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 888

       I wrote this... coz I wanted to say this,

    yet again I couldnt say it, so I wrote it.

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    dotsYhewwhu heart beats....dots

    Oh baby.... where are you?
    You are far apart and
    Physically I am the one with a beating heart

    Oh love why you are so far away,
    It isnít easy to be with out you,

    That strange smile
    Gullible mischief in your eyes

    I miss it all
    And miss, I will miss
    I will miss and miss

    Until u come and kiss on my cheeks
    I can see your face blush

    When you read this,
    Remember my name

    Will love you all the time...
    Long as I live

    Oh dear heart, donít beat so fast
    Love takes a life time to come
    And it takes life away

    You canít go back
    You canít forget

    What you are,
    What you meant,
    Who you where and how well you were to me...

    Oh my love

    Submitted on 2007-10-06 06:23:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really Good. I Really Enjoyed It And As This Is A Common Topic Too Talk About I Thought You're Peice Was Extremely Original .! x
    | Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by crazijessi | [ Reply to This ]

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