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Yhewwhu heart beats....


Author: rawpot
ASL Info:    24/M/India
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Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
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I wrote this... coz I wanted to say this,

yet again I couldnt say it, so I wrote it.



Yhewwhu heart beats....



Oh baby.... where are you?
You are far apart and
Physically I am the one with a beating heart

Oh love why you are so far away,
It isn’t easy to be with out you,

That strange smile
Gullible mischief in your eyes

I miss it all
And miss, I will miss
I will miss and miss

Until u come and kiss on my cheeks
I can see your face blush

When you read this,
Remember my name

Will love you all the time...
Long as I live

Oh dear heart, don’t beat so fast
Love takes a life time to come
And it takes life away

You can’t go back
You can’t forget

What you are,
What you meant,
Who you where and how well you were to me...

Love,
Oh my love




Submitted on 2007-10-06 06:23:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Really Good. I Really Enjoyed It And As This Is A Common Topic Too Talk About I Thought You're Peice Was Extremely Original .! x
| Posted on 2007-10-06 00:00:00 | by crazijessi | [ Reply to This ]


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