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    dots Submission Name: Fighting Myselfdots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I was told to do some soul searching by my friends and on the exact same night this just popped up inside my head.


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    dotsFighting Myselfdots
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    The darkness has never been this consuming,
    I feel like I'm suffocating,
    Like I'm gasping for breath.

    The stillness of the night only leaves me thinking,
    Wondering what I should be,
    Who I should be.

    Who I was a year ago has changed as I've become nothing more than all the other personalities I possess.

    Like enemies they are.
    As I often find myself competing against them in order to speak out.

    But somewhere in the dark and beneath the cold I still exist,
    Waiting anxiously for an exit,
    To take me from this place of confusion,
    To a place where Brian is still me.




    Submitted on 2007-10-06 23:40:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting, i can just feel the turmoil within you, Brian is still there (he's even closer than you think) you just need to stop trying so hard and let him come back to you. When you try to hard to find him thats when you overlook him, let him come to you.

    Your shoulder when your burdens are heavy,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-10-13 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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