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    dots Submission Name: Speak, Rymedots
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    Author: Kube
    ASL Info:    24/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 64/56/32
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 822
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 778



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    dotsSpeak, Rymedots
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    Something that I should of said
    Nothing beats what we could have been, if not are
    Life as we know it; could maybe just be it
    Ice cubes water down the truth as I know it
    Scrub the facts from the truth.

    Itís brutal; but itís only a lie if itís not what I believe
    See it through my eyes
    I canít bare to give the pain
    I still know im alive
    I canít bare at all
    See it when I lie, I see it when I pray

    Love me for whatever that I am
    I love for nothing, I no longer know what it is
    I still seek
    Living with a mind thatís not my own
    Time needs a redial; I need a tone

    I can live when I see fit
    But I donít
    So thatís why I quit.




    Submitted on 2007-10-07 09:28:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really feel your emotion in this...your very gifted...this hit a nerve when i read it...keep up the good work...
    | Posted on 2007-10-22 00:00:00 | by maggotgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      It very good and many people feel this way from time to time but you should never give up. Good job. ^-^
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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