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    dots Submission Name: Was It All A Liedots
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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    32/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 86/94/59
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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       was everything you promised me a lie?


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    dotsWas It All A Liedots
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    Am I really that bad
    you have to be asleep or ready to fuck.
    Just to be near me
    without running a muck.
    Do you really hate me so much
    there's so little left.
    I'm that hard to love?
    When did I become such a weight?
    That I stopped being something worthy
    nothing good, nothing great.
    Should I just let go
    give in?
    Know that there's nothing left
    no way to win.
    Is this really how you see me
    what I've become in your eyes?
    Every thing I believed in
    Was it all just a lie?



    April 30,2007




    Submitted on 2007-10-07 14:47:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yet again, this is very not-so-good. You should try to dig a little deeper, make your writing a little more personal. Great writers dont write generic teeny bopper angst poetry, they write their own personal odes to pain and love (or whatever their topic of choice is).
    | Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]



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