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The Truth Behind Forever


Author: trynfinity
ASL Info:    38/f/California
Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149 /145 /91
Words: 192
Class/Type: Misc /Alone
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You were the one thing
I thought was forever.
When I believed
forever was true.


The Truth Behind Forever



I never really thought I'd be here
that things would be this way.
That the love you promised was forever
you'd take back just to give away.
~
That you'd really stop wanting
forever to share with me.
See it with someone else
like that was how you always dreamed it would be.
~
I never really thought we'd be over
or you'd stop loving me like you did.
I believed in all the forevers
you promised me you'd give.
~
What happened why'd things change?
Why'd you take it away from me?
Was it just a game?
A way to be cruel and mean?
~
I wasn't good enough was I?
I didn't give you enough.
I loved you with all I was
and you said I loved you to much.
~
You were the one thing
I thought was forever.
When I believed
forever was true.
~
But forevers just a word to describe
something that lasts longer than you.
It never really happens
forevers don't come true.
~
I know cause I believed
until forever was given away
by you!






April 30,2007




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  I know cause I believed
until forever was given away
by you!

WOW...OUCH this is rough you have me rumbling and tumbling til the very end I like this I hadn't read a alone/upset post from you yet this is the first and its great. I am more to post vents or anger writes so to see a few Love ones is a nice break. But dang this is wow. Although I'd work on not over using the word "forever" even though I know its part of the title and so on. Maybe could make it to where it just said so frequently, just a thought. Nevertheless over all its great

Jackz
| Posted on 2009-07-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  this was very, very, unfortunately not that impressive. In fact Im fairly certain every single line of that I have heard before, possibly in a song sung by hilary duff.
| Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
   you are right when people say forever it is just a word that lasts longer than them. you seem to write a lot about how you have lost someone you hold very dear to you and they had your heart. I think that this is your strong point but its just my opinion this is a brillant write and i think that a loss doesn't mean anything to someone unless you have experienced it.

Poet09
| Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
  very sad, but very true.

I once believed in forever...but thankfully, I know better now.

This is almost heart wrenching if you've experienced such a loss and a complete shattering of all your dreams and ideas.

So sad...
| Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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