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A Broken Soul


Author: trynfinity
ASL Info:    38/f/California
Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149 /145 /91
Words: 49
Class/Type: Poetry /BrokenHeart
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Leaving my soul shattered,
broken , unable to heal.


A Broken Soul



Here I sit
in the dark I cry.
What had been promised
I was stripped of
it was all a lie.
*
The love I had believed in
I knew was real
was erased so quickly.
Leaving my soul shattered,
broken , unable to heal.



02/10/2007




Submitted on 2007-10-07 15:00:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  to whom this may concern i like this poem because you are straight foward with your point. Secondly you show how the effects of the one you love can be gone within the blink of an eye. Finally i would like to read some of your other works if i may please and thank you.

Poet09
| Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
  short and sweet what else can i say.

Question what is the star for. is there something left out to be filled.
| Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]


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