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    dots Submission Name: The box of your stuffdots
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    Author: dancer06
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 232/171/43
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I guess there's not much more I can say about this.


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    dotsThe box of your stuffdots
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    I put your things in a box today.
    The blanket you gave me
    because it was my favorite
    once apon a time.

    In the box also rests you clothes
    The shirts you gave me to sleep in.
    The green silk boxer shorts,
    that you never wore, but I loved.

    In the box is the jewelry you gave me.
    The fairly inexpensive jewelry,
    that you spent what little money you had
    to make me feel pretty.

    The picutres of us are off my wall.
    They rest in the box as well
    And we looked so happy.
    Where did we go wrong?

    So I have all these things in the box,
    and nowhere to put the box
    It just sits in the middle of the room
    And it hurts more than any one item.

    What am I going to do with this box?
    Should I try to give it to you?
    Would you even want them?
    Every item that has our memories entertwined?

    No, I imagine you dont want them.
    All these things in the box,
    they probably don't mean a thing.
    Not to anyone but me now.

    I have nowhere to hide this brown box
    The box that is our lives now.
    The end of past.
    The symbol of no future.

    I can't burn this box.
    I can't hide this box
    because worse than this physical box
    is the box in my mind, in my heart.

    A box that won't be filled anymore.
    An empty box.
    That like this brown box
    can never be forgot.




    Submitted on 2007-10-07 20:36:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is done quite well, and as someone who has had to put all the ex's stuff in a box, this perfectly describes the feelings of assembling them all together.

    its not a fun feeling at all. and the box just becomes this ominous thing after a while when you finally get everything inside it. it just becomes compounded and compacted hurt.

    this is really quite good.
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]
      you should listen to the song "to the left" by beyonce. I just thought about it as soon as I saw the title and read a bit of it.
    | Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love similies and you have used this one well..I can relate to and understand this emptiness and loss. My only advise would be to, not try to understand it all right now, even though that is what we tend to want to do. I hope that things get better for you in time and that your heart is whole once again. I am sorry that you are feeling this right now and understand your msg earlier a little better....stormy
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      This broke my heart. I'm not going to lie. I'm glad I'm coming up to see you this weekend. I have missed you, Cat. And, I do love you, so much! *Virtual hugs until she can give you a real one*
    | Posted on 2007-10-08 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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