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    dots Submission Name: you know the onedots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711/397/207
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 830
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 537



    Description:
       my song, but of course you just laughed
    our song, even though i never told you i tought of it that way
    i cant sleep without it anymore
    i have to fall asleep with the stereo on, or elsei wake up in the middle of the night
    i will wake up crying either way
    might as well wake up with sweet memories, than wake up scared and lonely
    you know the song
    or at least i hope you do


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    that song was on last night, you know the one
    the one that i groove to with that goofy smile
    the one that i know every word of and love to fall asleep to
    you know the one
    that one that i say is my song
    yeah that one
    you know the one
    or do you?
    do you know anything at all?
    do you know me?
    or am i just a paperdoll
    forgotten in the bottom of the box
    but i heard that song last night
    i know the one, even if you dont
    you know the one




    Submitted on 2007-10-08 10:47:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yeah I know the one, its goes something like this.............(smile)
    Thanks for sharing a insight of yourself.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-12-02 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent write, sorry for my extended absence, haven't been writing much lalely.
    | Posted on 2007-10-31 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      cool, using music and keeping it ambiguous helped draw me in. i know the one -- yeah, sure. feelings of neglect yeah -- i got it. it was easy to understand -- good stuff. pretty cool.
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      bringing sexy back? no?
    maybe you need a different song.
    or a different guy.
    or a different dance.
    strange how a something like a song can be the test strip for the validity or reality of a relationship.
    1
    | Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]
      awww sad...

    There are so many of these songs...

    And don't knock paper dolls...they are cool.

    But this is very heartfelt...I feel you, dawg...
    | Posted on 2007-10-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      If he doesn't know the song I do. I think every couple has one whether it's one they say is theirs or not. It sucks to loose part of your song. Because it will always be your song whether its missing a very important verse or not. Well just remember there are two ways it can affect You. You can use it to get over the hurt and remember the great times or you can let it bring you down. Just remember if your a faded paperdoll there are lots of artists out there that can brighten you up again.

    Owl
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by owlman23 | [ Reply to This ]


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