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    dots Submission Name: Sunny dots
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    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 113/123/144
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsSunny dots
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    Lost in the epiphany of you,
    words can not describe my fervor for you;
    only the sky can see my happiness
    wind embracing me close,
    sun kisses on my face;

    Everything you do makes me love you more;
    fills me up with something,
    like nothing I've felt before;

    Hands to the sky;
    you are the only one that understands,
    sunny smiles;
    happiness you are




    Submitted on 2007-10-08 13:47:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is nice but feels as though it is missing something or incomplete. Perhaps it is the way I read or perhaps it holds more meaning for you personally...stormy
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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