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Falling dominoes

Author: EbonyBlood
ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79 /79 /73
Words: 152
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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It's about war. I guess. Maybe the 'war' of today. Or the war of life. >_>; I just suck lately.

Falling dominoes

One by one, in a chain reaction; we fall.
Fall down like dominoes, set up together by the great being we know as god.
One by one, in a chain reaction; we are set up.

Some don't want to stay up, and others just won't fall down.
One by one, in a chain reaction; we live.
Together we fall, together we rise.
One by one, in a chain reaction; we die.

Crying in the dark of the night,
No one dare question the light.
And the dark is cold, and the light is warm,
One by one, in a chain reaction; we search for our light.

Light is happiness, dark is sadness.
No one now, can find the light.
Sitting alone for the next mistake is just not right.
One by one, in a chain reaction; we are people, fighting this war alone.

Submitted on 2007-10-08 18:17:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the comparison of war being like a game of dominoes. Tip one over and the whole things falls. Life is like that sometimes, too; one little thing goes wrong and suddenly it feels like everything is out of control. This has a nice feel to it, it sounds very honest. Nice job.

- The Queen
| Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]

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