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    dots Submission Name: THE MUTTERINGS OF A CONFUSED IDIOTdots
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    Author: marray proetus
    ASL Info:    100/F/no where
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 24/32/30
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This is what happens when I let my imagination go. Critize it with all your heart my friends!


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    dotsTHE MUTTERINGS OF A CONFUSED IDIOTdots
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    THE MUTTERINGS OF A CONFUSED IDIOT

    I am not so bright you see,
    Sometimes I can be as lost as a fish in the sea
    Not understanding the words that are said to my face
    I am lost and wondering in the confusions of this case
    I am not sure when I will be free
    I really donít want to pay this fee

    I see the look you give me
    But I am not sure what you are saying
    Is it ďIdiotĒ or ďFreakĒ
    But if it was, then why would you turn beet?
    I am confused you see of these butterflies
    You send flying inside me

    I am trying to be apart
    So I donít become a patient of the heart
    Itís better if I try to be smart
    So letís depart




    Submitted on 2007-10-08 20:19:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I must say, the title caught my attention and I had to read it.
    I don't really want to criticize it though. In some parts the rhyming seems a little too predictable, but that's all.
    "So I donít become a patient of the heart" is probably my favorite line. It's kind of simple, but says a lot.

    Your imagination is very interesting (in a good way).

    Nicely done.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]


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