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    dots Submission Name: Lost in the confusions of the worlddots
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    Author: marray proetus
    ASL Info:    100/F/no where
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 24/32/30
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       The bold is the man and italics is the woman. Yah I know it's pretty random


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    dotsLost in the confusions of the worlddots
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    Dialogue

    I am unaware of myself
    Tell me what your eyes say, tell me?
    There are two eyes
    Whatís in them
    There is a face
    Whose face?
    Ask your heart, ask the heavens

    Lost and wondering in the confusions of the world, I am lost in you.

    What happened, tell me about this confusion?
    Tell me what has changed?
    The world since you came
    Donít say anything
    Why not?
    Because I might just get lost in your words

    Lost and wondering in the confusions of the world, I am lost in you.




    Submitted on 2007-10-08 20:50:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love these back and forth metaphysical love poems. I never get tired of them.

    Who can't resist using the good 'ol "lost in you" phrase? It is sweet and heartwarming.

    I like this part of the poem the most:

    "What happened, tell me about this confusion?
    Tell me what has changed?
    The world since you came"

    Ah, women. How they change everything. How they light up my eyes and distract my mind. They are capable of changing the world as we see it.
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]


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