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    dots Submission Name: Touch of Winddots
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    Author: Saidin
    ASL Info:    16/M/BJ
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 11/19/17
    Words: 280
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsTouch of Winddots
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    A wind across the snow covered cliffs,
    a strip of cloud above.
    The glaring sun upon the ice,
    through the frozen air.

    Clouds of snow, they cast no shadow,
    dancing and swirling,
    amidst the gale.

    My footsteps echo beyond the ice,
    down the steps below.
    I walk behind the airy breeze,
    its course directs my fate.

    I have traveled far and wide,
    through the infinite tunnel,
    past the waterfall at the
    edge, and across the oceans vast.
    Yet never have I felt alone, for with me is the wind.
    But as I stand, above the clouds,
    on the steps, to the hall of

    Father himself,
    the piercing howl of emptiness,
    the blinding sound of silence,
    the scorching touch of steaming ice,
    and the scathing tear of the
    cold, cold
    wind—Oh
    they shatter ‘round me, cast me down, and from
    the skies I fall.

    Where is the wind,
    the gentle touch of a petal,
    the mighty currents of the sea,
    the soothing voice of the nightingale?
    Sky and earth I rush past, and
    into darkness,
    again.

    A burst of flame erupts,
    and trails of smoke rise high.
    I walk the path of gravel black,
    crunching stones below.

    Pits of fire scream of
    Pain—an anguish of suffering
    alone.
    Still I walk.

    Among the flames, under water,
    through the leaves, bushes and fauna.
    I follow the footsteps of a pilgrim vain,
    to reach the everlasting stairs.

    Still, still, oh terribly still!—
    no more do the leaves flutter, the birds fly, the snow dance, the rivers gush,
    and the clouds lay bloated,
    rotting carcasses of sickly mules…
    all without the
    touch of the wind.




    Submitted on 2007-10-09 06:03:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is well written to show your feelings about the wind...
    i like hearing the wind "sing" and seeing it "dance"...
    its caress on my cheek
    really a lovely companion
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting, interesting. The wind is a close friend who always flies by your side. I like the idea of having a graceful, flowing companion.

    This poem is very fantasy like. It has just a little touch of Lord of the Rings in it. But what do I know? That's just something I picked up.

    The ending is very sad and melancholy. I too would feel lonely if the wind did not blow no more...not even gently...*sob*

    Overall, well done. Thanks for making me love the wind all the more.

    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]



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