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    dots Submission Name: Upon reading "The Wallflower"dots
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    Author: manwithnoname
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
    Elite Ratio:    5.84 - 314/278/117
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I wrote this after reading "The Wallflower" by eyeless in gaza.


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    dotsUpon reading "The Wallflower"dots
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    The wallflower
    The beauteous bloom
    Cast in shadow and gloom

    She never reaches out
    For fear that she will
    Wither, for fear that she
    Will burn red

    Watch her grow, swallowing
    The old brick in anguish and
    Loneliness!

    And one day, the wall will
    Fall down
    Fall down
    And then,
    Then,
    They will have to notice




    Submitted on 2007-10-09 08:55:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have quite a keen sense of presenting pieces that bring the reader to experience...sharing...observation

    I always enjoy "IT"!

    love,peace,joy&smiles 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-10-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      hi i,m glad it inspired you to write this poem,i enjoyed it , nicely written,well done,

    She never reaches out
    For fear that she will
    Wither, for fear that she
    Will burn red

    i liked this stanza, it,s like the idea i had when writting my poem, there are a lot of people out there, wallflowers who can relate to these poems, good poem
    take care
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]


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