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Upon reading "The Wallflower"

Author: manwithnoname
ASL Info:    18/M/Ontario
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I wrote this after reading "The Wallflower" by eyeless in gaza.

Upon reading "The Wallflower"

The wallflower
The beauteous bloom
Cast in shadow and gloom

She never reaches out
For fear that she will
Wither, for fear that she
Will burn red

Watch her grow, swallowing
The old brick in anguish and

And one day, the wall will
Fall down
Fall down
And then,
They will have to notice

Submitted on 2007-10-09 08:55:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You have quite a keen sense of presenting pieces that bring the reader to experience...sharing...observation

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| Posted on 2007-10-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  hi i,m glad it inspired you to write this poem,i enjoyed it , nicely written,well done,

She never reaches out
For fear that she will
Wither, for fear that she
Will burn red

i liked this stanza, it,s like the idea i had when writting my poem, there are a lot of people out there, wallflowers who can relate to these poems, good poem
take care
| Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]

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