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    dots Submission Name: Morgue Than Wordsdots
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    Author: Razor2TheRosary
    ASL Info:    24 - f - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 238/127/51
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1232
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       I stole the title from a song. I've never been good with titles.


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    dotsMorgue Than Wordsdots
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    It's the curse of you that I love the most.
    Empty glasses rise for a midnight toast.
    There's no room in your heart for the living,
    but bloodstained pillows are unforgiving
    because violence plays the role of a whore
    and murder descends to love's killing floor.
    Stars explode until you dance with a ghost.
    Maybe this virus can't be diagnosed.

    It's the fantasy that I love tonight,
    with chemicals and the will to ignite.
    I buried my dead in your hollow veins
    and bound them together with metal chains.
    Formaldehyde spins the chill from your spine,
    preserving your body's forlorn design.
    Eyes are disfigured by manic delight.
    Rolled back in your head, they wake when you bite.

    It's the overdose that I'd love to kill.
    Church lies in ruin on top of a hill.
    From the debris, your voice is a splinter,
    but I'd settle for another winter.
    Stab me again and I'll lick you to death,
    sucking the life from your summer's last breath.
    Dissected, I twitch, but only until
    teeth become dull and the crosses sit still.




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      Took it from a song. the title was what intrigued me to click on the poem, LOL. o well.

    "There's no room in your heart for the living,
    but bloodstained pillows are unforgiving
    because violence plays the role of a whore
    and murder descends to love's killing floor."

    I loved it. A whore?? very different. I absolutely love your work. they say so much and leave nothing out. Your way of words will attract envious readers. and i also prefer rhyming poems. To me they just seem easier to read. But i uderstsand that some poems are btter off without rythms, we don't want them to sound forced.

    Anyways...

    I loved it, and once again i am gonna favor a poem written by you. ^_^

    Cry
    | Posted on 2008-01-30 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I feel a strong since that there is a very deep meaning in this one? Kind of religous kind of gothic. I really enjoy reading your work.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      If I said to you that every time I read your work you mature, would you take it the right way without feeling patronized or something?

    I always have found your writing mature in the sense that you can put the thoughts and images others try to hide and deny from others out there in such a direct and descriptive way. You put a reader in uncomfortable places they don't like others to know they have been in or feel like they are in...and yet you give it to them in such a way that they can safely feel not so alone - without ever having to admit they understand - get it - or have been there...

    In this you do it again and even better...your lines catch the attention and draw the reader deeper into your setting - and you never disappoint.

    Again, I can't pick a favorite line because I like em all, but for personal reasons, this one stuck out, "Dissected, I twitch, but only until
    teeth become dull and the crosses sit still"
    And your title...KILLER - excellent

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-10-13 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      You are creepingly delightful and your works are an absolute orgasm for the eyes. (How's that for best comment? lol)

    Lickin' the blood from my fingertips,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2007-10-13 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Nikkki,
    WOW!...let me leave it at that and a comment for this weekend...but excellent write
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2007-10-12 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this a lot especially with the rhyme scheme its great a lot of ppl (including me sometimes) can't pull that off:)
    i don't even really have a favorite line bc i liked the while thing so much
    | Posted on 2007-10-10 00:00:00 | by SYnesthesiA_WaR | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...this has those little sexy undertones in its darkness, yet it reminds me of the autumn season. Its a sure thing, chicken wing, there is a harmony to what you sing.

    Nice stuff.

    | Posted on 2007-10-10 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      my oh my
    you have such an original and deliciouslt morbid take on things
    i think thats what draws me to your writing
    everything you write is like sifting through a morgue for the corpse with most slices and dices, only in your case it's all good
    each word you tyoe drips with this lovely disdain and hatred for the lower mortals of the planet who have yet to see the beauty of the shadows and bloodstains like you have
    yet you also write with deep well of understanding for the human condition, no matter how pitiful it can be

    i can only applaud you for your brilliance and thank you for, again, sharing your work with the rest of us.

    "It's the fantasy that I love tonight,
    with chemicals and the will to ignite."
    my favorite part

    nifty
    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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