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    dots Submission Name: opening the abundant alwaysdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsopening the abundant alwaysdots
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    to make
    & pledge
    what can't be broken,
    must be broken.

    or so it goes
    in this modern love
    which somehow must perish
    & re-perish
    & be reborn
    for the sake of going back.
    which can't be done.

    what i have here,
    right now,
    is all i've ever had
    & i've learned
    not to seek the demons of the past.

    where the heart goes,
    no one knows.

    as for my own,
    it stays put.
    as to let happen
    what can happen
    when you just let things happen.

    let all-heart weather
    breed a storm
    no phantom form can vanquish.

    in the trees we are forever.
    & i am forever in the trees
    opening the abundant always
    with lips to heat the cold nights
    of your belonging...




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      I love the ending-

    let all-heart weather
    breed a storm
    no phantom form can vanquish.

    in the trees we are forever.
    & i am forever in the trees
    opening the abundant always
    with lips to heat the cold nights
    of your belonging...

    Art.

    hope all is good with you,
    always in touch
    | Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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