Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Cry me a River Build a bridge and get over itdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 540
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 354



    Description:
       written to freddybuzzkill in an elite skills message
    eat it up romancers


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCry me a River Build a bridge and get over itdots
    -------------------------------------------


    cry me a river build a bridge and get over it
    I still loves ya and Im still here for you allways and forever
    If that bridge wasnt built from tears I'd ask you to cross it and then never again saunter over to the other side so that you could stay in my arms and share kisses with my lips forever Im not selfish for wanting you to myself




    Submitted on 2007-10-10 16:09:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Wow.


    It's one big sentence.


    After reading this, I was immediately bored and didn't' care.


    For starters, if the poet isn't going to give a damn about how their poem looks then that applies that I shouldn't give a damn about it either. The lack of puncutation, proper capitalization and linebreaks make this block of text less of a poem and more of a hallmark moment.

    Also, take the time to actually SPELLCHECK your work, as it is obvious that you didn't do it.

    The weak imagery didn't strike me in any effective way and the lack of form makes this poem biodegradable.

    | Posted on 2007-10-12 00:00:00 | by Skyhawk | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    150911

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Live In Between written by teika5
    untitled written by Outlaw
    None the Wiser written by endlessgame23
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    Untitled written by Daniel Barlow
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    FamiliarDemons ©™ written by kyserin
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Not the Devil, but the Wind written by endlessgame23
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    Dream written by closetpoet

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry