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    dots Submission Name: Cry me a River Build a bridge and get over itdots

    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       written to freddybuzzkill in an elite skills message
    eat it up romancers

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    dotsCry me a River Build a bridge and get over itdots

    cry me a river build a bridge and get over it
    I still loves ya and Im still here for you allways and forever
    If that bridge wasnt built from tears I'd ask you to cross it and then never again saunter over to the other side so that you could stay in my arms and share kisses with my lips forever Im not selfish for wanting you to myself

    Submitted on 2007-10-10 16:09:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    It's one big sentence.

    After reading this, I was immediately bored and didn't' care.

    For starters, if the poet isn't going to give a damn about how their poem looks then that applies that I shouldn't give a damn about it either. The lack of puncutation, proper capitalization and linebreaks make this block of text less of a poem and more of a hallmark moment.

    Also, take the time to actually SPELLCHECK your work, as it is obvious that you didn't do it.

    The weak imagery didn't strike me in any effective way and the lack of form makes this poem biodegradable.

    | Posted on 2007-10-12 00:00:00 | by Skyhawk | [ Reply to This ]

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