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release your grasp


Author: DontLetGo421
Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118 /238 /141
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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dont know yet still making switches


release your grasp



i lay shattered, tears streaming down
i scream and i rant, i need out of this town
too many failures with nowhere new to start
tried to love you, but you were without a heart.

tangled in your web trying to break free
tell me what is it that you have over me
even when i hate you,you have hold on my life
i need a clean break but i know itll result in strife

im being sucked under , release your grasp
shortness of breathe cant you feel my rath
i love that i hate you, you deserve my pain
oh dont be upset,you began this whole game




Submitted on 2007-10-10 18:20:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I hate the feeling of someone holding on when it's obvious that they need to let you go. They can't feel you strife because they don't want it there. they to live ther elittle fantisy. Any way I like it good job. ^-^
| Posted on 2007-10-10 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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