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    dots Submission Name: release your graspdots

    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsrelease your graspdots

    i lay shattered, tears streaming down
    i scream and i rant, i need out of this town
    too many failures with nowhere new to start
    tried to love you, but you were without a heart.

    tangled in your web trying to break free
    tell me what is it that you have over me
    even when i hate you,you have hold on my life
    i need a clean break but i know itll result in strife

    im being sucked under , release your grasp
    shortness of breathe cant you feel my rath
    i love that i hate you, you deserve my pain
    oh dont be upset,you began this whole game

    Submitted on 2007-10-10 18:20:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hate the feeling of someone holding on when it's obvious that they need to let you go. They can't feel you strife because they don't want it there. they to live ther elittle fantisy. Any way I like it good job. ^-^
    | Posted on 2007-10-10 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]

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