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    dots Submission Name: Do It, Do It.dots

    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    dotsDo It, Do It.dots

    Do It, Do It.

    Don't blame Mr Bush,
    Blame all the history,
    Blame everyone and everything,
    Take blame and be set free,
    Find your mutual ground,
    You have to turn this whole thing around.

    Look at the gathering clouds,
    If you want peace just reach out,
    The whole world is falling in love all around you,
    Oh young America, You are a child of ours,
    You have a light to be found.

    "We wanna love, We don't wanna fight"
    (fat freddy's Drop)

    Never be ashamed of who you are,
    It's not who you asked to be,
    The redemption trail is carved, it's never been easier to see than now.

    Watch the rain start to fall down,
    Look up and let go of all your hate,
    Look back and show others the way,
    It starts at ground zero, things will never be the same.

    "We wanna love, We don't wanna fight"
    (fat freddy's Drop)

    All and all; just stand tall,
    Love one and love all,
    We will be here and you can be that sure.

    Submitted on 2007-10-11 18:04:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this writing is great, stays on point, this is the way it should be?
    | Posted on 2007-10-11 00:00:00 | by Gmann | [ Reply to This ]

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