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    Author: Skyhawk
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 20/38/22
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Death makes me think of sleepy makes me think of John Cage makes me think of 4'33.


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    @@c"Fifty Negative Minutes Combined Briskly with Eighty Positive Minutes at the Strands of Phantasmagoria"




    [ 1st TACET

    Upon genuine classroom articles,
    double digits pull their teeth out
    to the iron-curtain structures
    of swallowing Liberty-ful novels.

    Internal chatter shatters the null-sounds;
    projecting inner transmissions
    about the log-chewing symptoms
    of Actions Carrying Terrorism.

    2nd TACET

    A desk converses with the square-tiled floor
    while waves from mechanical gills
    spill anti-cyanide breakfast
    for the respiratory birds beneath.

    During compulsive eating of novels,
    one brittle bird squawks Bronchitis.
    Another bathes in Surreal form;
    watching images on clean, lucid screens.

    3rd TACET

    A stubby sausage turns a dead tree sheet
    before the daring dictator
    (the Cage was badly feared by John)
    swallows the systematical silence ]

    "Whole."
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      What I like most is learning about new things. John Cage = interesting fellow. You incorporate him in this piece and maybe a bit of Rauschenburg too (or not).

    I like the tacet between stanzas, forcing the reader to pause, to be silent, but not. It allows the reader to contemplate and absorb.

    I wrote something once, about silence having sound as nothing is ever really silent (at least to me). As well, I think silence (and the lack there of) makes people uncomfortable.

    These are things that come to mind:

    branching out
    not being cookie-cutter
    looking outside of the box
    viewing from a different vantage point
    being inventive

    Poetry and the arts allow us to express these ideals. It is an outlet to share our perceptions. As to its acceptance, I suppose it depends on people being open to anothers interpretation.

    What I like most about your poetry, is it forces me to think. It is a bit obscure yet leaves enough room to come up with my own conclusion.
    | Posted on 2007-10-23 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]



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