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    dots Submission Name: Criminaldots

    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 727
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       The condition. It's most likely been at least 5 years since I last wrote about this. It's hazy sometimes. But I don't forget. For A.M., who never appreciated my words and never will.

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    Full of clichés, sporadic laughter,
    this story is still often recited
    when nights are long and hot,
    enduring midnights and sunrises
    that soon erase any tale told.
    Listeners will not recall my disgrace
    when morning retrives us.

    But I am not blessed enough to forget.
    For while men grow old
    and their wives blossom in beauty,
    I remain as shut out as the morning
    you folded me into a box
    and closed me up
    and put me away.

    And I always regreat speaking of it.
    This flaw I will never be rid of,
    this single mistake which holds on
    tighter than sin
    with more subtlety than a dimming light.
    None see it but I, the condition
    of holding back, the irremovable mask,
    caged-up heart, tied-down wings,
    never letting any in to view
    my boxed self.

    You own me. You set in motion
    this lifetime of struggle, of
    fighting my own strength.
    I am bound and chained to you,
    captive to your punishment,
    to your perception of what I am.
    For in those hours preluding sunrise
    in the rapture of fervent tension,
    you took my untainted declarations
    and turned them to unforgivable crimes.

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