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    dots Submission Name: Pale Orchids dots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots Pale Orchids dots

    Upon the hilltop, near the stone,
    Your scent is here like some perfume.
    I sigh, ah, but I sigh alone,
    Here at your tomb.

    The night is here now scarce begun,
    And I am in this web of gloom,
    What had been two is now but one.
    The shadows loom.

    Off to the right these silent hills
    A lonely aspect all assume,
    The moonlight my poor heart so stills,
    And would entomb.

    The breeze has swept the leaves away,
    Pale orchids by your grave still bloom,
    As on my face the distant spray
    Of ocean spume.

    The sea rolls on, the scent of thyme
    Comes to me as my griefs resume,
    It seems there is no end to Time,
    But only doom…

    Submitted on 2007-10-12 07:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh wow
    this was so melancholy
    when i think of all your pieces put together, this one piece could be the explanation of all the others

    | Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      the poem opens hauntingly, and drew me right in from the start, carrying on through the whole poem, wonderfly written and rhymed,

    It seems there is no end to Time,
    But only doom.

    i liked this ending. i have the pictures in my head of a lonely heartbroken man, standing at the grave of the lost loved one,no more sunshine only doom. true love, death, melancholy, yes a lot of passion(in my opinion)
    in your poem, i really enjoyed this poem.
    take care
    | Posted on 2007-10-13 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad and haunting! It is rich with that ethereal mood that you are so good at creating in your verse! This is haunting and soulful, and an excellent read!
    | Posted on 2007-10-12 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. it flowed magnificently and the emotion was portrayed fantastically. Keep up the awesome work and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2007-10-12 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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