The expectations of others

Author: Jan ASL Info:    19/female/PA Elite Ratio:    4 - 227 /251 /39 Words: 104

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The expectations of others

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These are the things expected of me. Where will I go and what will I be? The questions are clear but my answer just isn't. What path will I choose, will I make the right decision? They all ask what will become of me As if I fell out of their family tree I try to be great, just like my father said but being a disappointment to him is what I most dread. These are the things expected of me, but at least I learn from what I see and that living up to the expectations of others, just isn't for me

Submitted on 2004-06-22 17:14:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I say don't listen to other people for what they expect you to be just be your self and do your best and they'll love you anyway even if you never do live up to what they expect you to be.

| Posted on 2004-09-11 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]

choose to become wat u become.. if u r wat is wanted of u... if ur gr8 in wat is wanted of u .. why dont u become gr8 in some that ur good at.. ur good at writting... ur creative.. creative people always lead...ur not loser.. have no fear... fear must b faced.. have no fear of failure.. fear failing to try dear.. bye

| Posted on 2004-08-07 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]

Ok... the other two picked out the errors so I'm going to point out a lot of good. You are 14, you have talent and I can see this through this piece. I agree that with the rhyming its somewhat limited but that doesn't mean that you can't add another stanza. I know what you are going through too... I'm only a little older than you and people do the same thing to me. "What are you going to do with your life?" they keep asking... The answer hasn't decided to pop before my eyes yet though. I hate to tell you this but don't expect it to end before too long... eventually they might give up and leave the subject alone ^.^ but you'll just hafta tough it through. And about disappointing people... don't worry about it too much. Show them some of your writing theres no way that can disappoint. This is a pretty well written piece for someone as young as yourself. Its meaning is clear, and despite the few mistakes its almost perfect. Congrats on a great piece... -Alli

| Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]

write on, girlfriend! i wrote something the other day similar to this sentiment: i've been running this race all my life mostly against myself and always coming in a close second behind somebody else's expectations. rebel, rebel, and be your own person! amen!

| Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

The rhyming in this case, kind of puts limits on this poem. The rhythm is a little off, but it's easily fixed. But for the topic...I'm going through a similar, if not identical situation...and you did a good job of capturing all of its entailing emotions

| Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]

oh how true this is! other than a few grammatical errors, this piece made a lot of sense! correct those and you will have a jewel on your hands, hon! mwa! *taset the rainbow*

| Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by prettygrnEyes | [ Reply to This ]

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