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    dots Submission Name: Childhood bluesdots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 492/502/133
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsChildhood bluesdots
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    A familiar breeze touched her cold cheek,
    so gentle, so known, so fragrant -
    when ages back, still weaving dreams,
    of a now cruel world - then exciting and awaited;

    She stumbled upon a thorny stone -
    of present,
    Remember when love always remained,
    saluted times of sincerity
    and matters of heart? - the silent soul wondered;

    Those times of play -
    when me is you,
    you is me - almost like those keys of red piano - friends and no foes,
    sentences ended in exclamations,
    Now -
    when senses come too easily -
    sentences end in questions,
    foes make closest companions
    friends seemed distant - unbothered;

    A rainbow was so sought after,
    those clouds had their own stories,
    A shower of rain would bring so much glory,
    Games we played -
    A much running around,
    chasing all and no one,
    hiding and seeking,
    camping and walking,
    chatting endlessly, laughing a bit too much,
    doing a lot of unimportant things -
    were they?!
    pretending to conquer this world -
    one day,
    this puzzled world;

    A familiar breeze touched her old cheek
    so gentle, so known, so fragrant -
    and tears ran down too easily -
    overwhelming, regretting and missing.




    Submitted on 2007-10-13 17:51:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh this is so good and true
    I really LOVED the emotion and thought you put into this write
    I for one am a 38 year old man who honestly will never grow up because I am so afraid of losing my youth
    The World was so Free and the problems of the World seemed so far away
    The Good Lord knows I would give anything to return to that time
    I am making this a Favorite
    You did an exceptionally Good Job with this
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh this sounds so sad, like a lost hope? is all ok?
    | Posted on 2007-10-14 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]



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