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    dots Submission Name: Takes Timedots
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    Author: mekisha4ever
    ASL Info:    39yespleaseNV.
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 38/36/47
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTakes Timedots
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    It all takes time to see
    Just what mite be
    We meet many in life
    And need none in death
    Our moment in time is fleeting
    like a blink of an eye
    We can never get back
    what time has pasted
    But look forward to the time you have
    just make it all the best of time's
    because it all takes time




    Submitted on 2007-10-13 21:15:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was good. a little different and a little hard to read, but good. you made some spelling errors i think.

    mite is might

    pasted is passed

    but i liked it all the same, i can tell what your saying, and it's a good topic. I wouldn't mind seeing some commas, but thats just me.

    Cry
    | Posted on 2008-01-14 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]


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