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i left you here

Author: Themissingshado
ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 23 /52 /32
Words: 156
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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i left you here

next to the ocean
sits a beautiful girl.
she cries, she cries, she cries
all alone.
she's waiting for someone
who will never return
Now the moments fade away
and everything things she knows will never be the same.

its killing her slowly
knowing that it's over
She calls and cries
she's so full of lies
So i left her here... to die.

the emptiness sets in
and tomorrow may not come.
she's stands up puts her feet in the ocean.
The tide is rushing in fast,
but she doesn't care
hope is far but not out there.
with one last glimpse of the summer sun
she dives in...

its killing her slowly
knowing that its over
she calls and cries
she's so full lies
so i left her here, i left her here to die.

next to the ocean
sits a boy regretting everything he let go...

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