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it's the silence that's slowly killing m


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 239
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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it's the silence that's slowly killing m



The lie lives
that it's all okay
but inside it's the truth that says
thats it's sad it ended this way
it's this unspoken truth
that stirs me in my dreams
I miss you
and you don't know

The lie eats
everything in me
it leaves its print
in my shattered heart
the tears, the scars
its a submersed pain
but it doesn't matter
cause nobody notices anyway
I miss you
But i won't say a thing

the lie wants
all i have to give
maybe killing me
but i won't let go
there's something unresolved
but i'll keep this silence
and take it to my grave
because i miss you
and i don't want things
to get any worse

You might feel the pain
If i could tell you again
how much i miss you
but i'll hush my sorrow
and let it subside
for tonight i'd rather not hurt you
and watch my spirit die

let it scream in my head
all the things
i never said
and let it echo from my soul
into the black of night
that you told me
things would be alright

but look now
behind this facade
it's me i'm sad
i'm sad......

and i'll admit it to the mirror
cause it listens to my cries
and i'll scream it into the shadows
till my voice is thin and shaky
"i'm not okay"




Submitted on 2007-10-14 05:16:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Your words are my weakness. This poem... It's my favourite poem by you. You remind me of things, so many different, awful, memories. You seem to know the other half of things, you seem to know the things in me that just make me hollow.


This poem stopped something inside me....
I felt so grey inside when I read this. It hurts to read your work...

But thats why I love reading it soo much. You remind me of my own passion...


I hope this isn't weird or anything but.. You're beautiful by what you write. By your words.

Thats all I can say.. I wish I could..idk.

-JK

| Posted on 2009-07-23 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is sad, and crazy and lovely
we've all been through things like this, i think

"and i'll admit it to the mirror
cause it listens to my cries
and i'll scream it into the shadows
till my voice is thin and shaky
"i'm not okay""
i loved this part the best

"You might feel the pain
If i could tell you again
how much i miss you
but i'll hush my sorrow
and let it subside
for tonight i'd rather not hurt you
and watch my spirit die"
i liked this part a whole lot, too
it makes me think of how sometimes it hurts worse to hurt someone you love than it hurts to hurt yourself...i hope that makes sense


this was a nicely done piece, and i look forward to seeing more from you in the future

xoxo
| Posted on 2007-10-16 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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