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    dots Submission Name: Curses and Rewardsdots

    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    Verse 1

    My heart belongs,
    To words of a song
    I'm trying hard not to lie,
    I'm trying hard not to cry...
    But time will not wait for me anymore,
    So unsure.
    Everything I've tried to do before,
    I dont know.

    "I should be here"
    "I have a purpose"

    "These feelings inside"
    "I have to fight them"

    "I am too blind"
    "To the answers I just cant find..."


    My bleeding veins,
    Has never burned like this...,
    Has never hurt like this...,
    Its too much to take...
    I lie awake,
    These wounds are just too deep...,
    I try so hard to speak...,
    All for my sake.

    Verse 2

    Memories alive,
    Take a look in the sky
    The moon shine down on me,
    Yet your face is all I see...
    All the pain I felt might go away,
    Some old day...
    What if it never what would I be,
    Can't be free

    "I should be here"
    "I should be noticed"

    "I was the one"
    "That always have doubted"

    "Its all my mistake"
    "This curse has no reward..."


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      Hmm a lot of imagery, you really have become a better lyricist since you have been here. you are definately a long ways away from your black book days.

    Your pen,
    | Posted on 2007-10-21 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]

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