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    dots Submission Name: Spitedots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       i actually dont know what this could be.
    I heard someone say "I dreamt of night" and so i sat down and wrote this.


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    I dreamt of night, and when i woke day had left me behind. Instead of keeping yesterday, I was given today.
    So I woke at night. At first I thought someone was playing a trick on me. Spite. Back and forth.
    Back and forth.
    I kept counting walls and stars.

    I dreamt of night, and when i woke day had not been so gentle to crop up. I felt alone and Spite had been eager. Spite had been eager for me.
    I woke at night. I slowly forgot about yesterday. But i didnt care anymore. Spite.
    Walls and stars. Walls and stars.
    backandforth

    I dreamt. I dreamt of tonight. Day.
    Spite goes back and forth and is eager for the stars on my walls.
    The night before tonight.
    Forth stars back my walls!
    Spite.

    Spite.

    I woke and day was beautiful. Day was too gentle to be night. The wind blew night away and i awoke with the first ray of light. There are no stars. No walls. In spite of everything nothing is missing.
    Yesterday was beautiful and I didnt spite anymore.
    To cut of ones nose to spite ones face.
    Day was beautiful.


    Spite.




    Submitted on 2007-10-14 14:08:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls and stars walls ans stars
    awesome line here i built you a wall with walls ans stars and plus i will say that we sleep despite our aching not to... out of spite... great poem
    and i say that out of spite....
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      somehow it bring to mind someone strapped on to a bed...most probably in a nuthouse...

    night...bring darkness to the room, light of the outside thru the bars of the window, tracing star-liked on the walls...
    darkness bring it with it haunting thoughts and spiteful ghosts of the past
    wall of darkness, wall of past...
    stars of light, stars of hope...

    eyes running back and forth, in panic, in insanity...hoping to see more then the memories of the past, more then what is at the corner of the eyes

    day...the light of day flood in to room, chasing away shadows, whispers of the insanity, chasing away walls and stars...but it is gentle as it brings with it relieve...

    i dont know how wrong or how right i am...but this is my impression and thoughts on it.please do not be offended if i am wrong and feel free to correct me
    | Posted on 2007-10-14 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]


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