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    dots Submission Name: Who Am Idots
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    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    24/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 58/57/17
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 549
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 625



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    dotsWho Am Idots
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    Who am I
    Who have I become
    Who is this person
    Where is she from

    I look in the mirror
    A stranger looks back
    I close my eyes
    Sympothy I lack

    Life is funny
    In this way
    You can live your life
    Never being okay

    You fake a smile
    You fake a laugh
    You don't know
    If this is the last

    I used to be happy
    I used to be proud
    I used to be confident
    But I'm not now

    Who am I
    Who have I become
    Who is this person
    Where is she from




    Submitted on 2007-10-14 20:53:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i understand where u r coming from...
    its basic and gets the point across.

    well done

    MDP
    | Posted on 2007-10-17 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel a certain connection to this piece
    a friend recently told me she saw me changing and she hated it, she just wished that i would change and be done with it, so she didnt have to watch and be there while it happened
    after she said that i did some serious thought and soul searching and i realized she was right in how much i changed, how very different i was
    when you first see that change in your self its scary
    this is a good piece, well written
    and i enjoyed it
    it made me think and you connected to your audience
    kudos
    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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