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    dots Submission Name: You're luckydots
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    Author: Jakirina
    ASL Info:    19/F/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216/200/80
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 617
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1110



    Description:
       The Villanelle is done.

    P.S.
    The repetition and rhyme is all traditional Villanelle form. So is the all 3 lines stanzas but the last one (4) as well.


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    dotsYou're luckydots
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    Didnít have the time, but thatís just fine,
    you never had me come to you and bear
    this treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.

    Waiting through long, immortal memories to align
    your ardorous ruminations with a honey-tongued snare.
    Didnít have the time, but thatís just fine.

    Twitching with greed and lusts oh so malign
    my rasping intentions multiply; a song of needles to tear
    this treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.

    It all over took me, clamorously pulsing and carmine,
    smoldering to ashes and dispersing me among air.
    Didnít have the time, but thatís just fine.

    Fever scouring through my groin screaming: my concubine
    find demise feasting by your hand or use me to spare
    this treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.

    Youíre lucky I died, unlived zealous means among my spine.
    Was going to feed you to my ire and sky of exasperated despair.
    Didnít have the time. But thatís just fine.
    This poor treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.




    Submitted on 2007-10-15 00:26:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really intense for some reason. To me anyway. I like the words you used even though I dont know what sanguinolent means, blood something. and I hadn't read the word carmine in awhile, which was nice. That always reminded me of a sensuous form of red you know? anyway, liked it. good poetry.
    Josh
    | Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]


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