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You're lucky

Author: Jakirina
ASL Info:    19/F/WI
Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216 /200 /80
Words: 165
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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The Villanelle is done.

The repetition and rhyme is all traditional Villanelle form. So is the all 3 lines stanzas but the last one (4) as well.

You're lucky

Didn’t have the time, but that’s just fine,
you never had me come to you and bear
this treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.

Waiting through long, immortal memories to align
your ardorous ruminations with a honey-tongued snare.
Didn’t have the time, but that’s just fine.

Twitching with greed and lusts oh so malign
my rasping intentions multiply; a song of needles to tear
this treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.

It all over took me, clamorously pulsing and carmine,
smoldering to ashes and dispersing me among air.
Didn’t have the time, but that’s just fine.

Fever scouring through my groin screaming: my concubine
find demise feasting by your hand or use me to spare
this treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.

You’re lucky I died, unlived zealous means among my spine.
Was going to feed you to my ire and sky of exasperated despair.
Didn’t have the time. But that’s just fine.
This poor treacherous sanguinolent soul of mine.

Submitted on 2007-10-15 00:26:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is really intense for some reason. To me anyway. I like the words you used even though I dont know what sanguinolent means, blood something. and I hadn't read the word carmine in awhile, which was nice. That always reminded me of a sensuous form of red you know? anyway, liked it. good poetry.
| Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]

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